Team 7

+: probably the story and visuals, if they are good.

-: I don't know what you mean by "Cool puzzle mechanics". Could be cool though.

1 change: Less unimportant text. Maybe it's a me-problem, but I don't want to read things unrelated to the puzzles. (I think in texts a good (not equal) balancing of character, story and Clues is important.) or convey more through other sorts of story telling (e.g. visual)

+ I really like the idea of giving the players a choice at the end. Branching games are always fun but they are unachievable with this time constraint but I think giving players the choice at the end is the perfect compromise for that. And unrelated to the game, the slides look really good.

-I think from the description the idea is a bit vague but I think it’s just because you haven’t finalized it yet and because you haven’t mentioned what the twist is but I am looking forward to discovering it and I think the game has great potential if the story is good.

1 change: I think the game has great potential but it depends a lot on the story in my opinion, so I would focus on finding an interesting twist and then I think the game can turn out really well.